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English discussion room => Poetry => Subiect creat de: rksingh din 21 Martie, 2005, 06:00:12 a.m.
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The steep ways of love
grow eyes on palm rocked in
whirling melody
In the fragrance of her breath
blooms the bud of joy
I gather the fruits
Flickers of peace hide
god in heart like running brook
love in nudity
She gives me of herself
each day and night fulfils in me
God smiles in hers eyes
Love waves rise and fall
between our shores of soul
we drink each others' sea
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It depends on what one should consider a haiku. Not all of them obey to the formal rules (which are not so important what so ever).
The theme of a haiku should be meditation upon the nature. Or in this case nature is at the most a pretext, if not only a background.
The inner structure of a haiku should contain three steps: reference to something (what?) in time (when?) and space (where?). The equation might be simplified to What/When? or What/ Where? Here I think none of those is applicable.
In a haiku we should not use the main tropes as Europeans use: metaphor, comparison, iteration etc., but rather ellipse, paradox (antinomy), alliteration. Here the author used metaphor more than once (blooms the bud of joy, love waves rise and fall, shores of soul).
The haiku is written in the middle of the nature, in a moment of illumination, surprise, inspiration. This not seems to be the case.
As a conclusion: I would definitely not call these poems (or this poem) a haiku.
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Hi, you have a point, and I agree with you. The three-liners look like haiku, but barring two, which are senryu, these are not difficult to be placed in the category of haiku.
I wish some more readers could reflect anfd share their views.
R.K.Singh